"What about you-"
"No, this is for you. You are the one who needs it. At least for a while. And I am going to see that you get what you need until I think you don't." She stuck her tongue out at him.
He sighed.
"Well, I'm going to get something to eat. Coming?"
"I'll be along in a moment." She carefully slid the hotel portfolio from under cup. Smiling to herself and wondering if she could avoid telling him that she arrived last night, taken the adjoining room for the night and gone window shopping only to find a rare bottle of Chanel No. 9. She looked in her big bag and wrapped the bottle of scent in her black negligee and shoved them further down into her bag. She was pretty sure he'd like the sweet, earthy new scent.
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When I see a first story comment, my expectations are low. I needn't have done that for you. Your writing is excellent and the story was spot on. I gave it five stars, but wished it could have been more.
The only nit I will point out is that from the tagline, I expected the protagonist to be a woman.
Please write more.more...
Good but long
The bar scene wasn't necessary to the story, lengthening it but not adding much except some very vague question of whether Kelly the barmaid had somehow beaten him to the room, which didn't stand up to any scrutiny. Also, I'm sure I'd recognize my own wife's voice in the dark even if I didn't expect her to be there. Still, good details, solid writing other than those plot criticisms. I'd read more of your stuff.more...
Great story!
One of the best I've read in a while. It's a nice treat to read a story with a "feel-good" ending on LW. Don't let these armchair critics discourage you. They wouldn't know a good story if it jumped up and bit them in the ass. 5*more...
Great LW story
gave you a 5 for effort and content
Don't let them get you down, interesting story, well written! Yes editing needs improving but that's the case with 99.99% of all lit stories. I found the extra information added to the mystery. Without it you would have known it was the wife from the start. Too many readers want nothing but stroke stories. It's a shame they can't understand the difference between a bar room tail and literature.... Not saying this qualifies for the latter, but it was way way above the former. Good read! And no it wasn't too long!more...
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