Even though we hadn't taken off for home, the whole time still feels like a dream to me. I wondered how many times I would have to repeat this story to Philip so here I am writing it all down. There is much more to tell about that time and I think there could possibly be more in my future. Stay tuned!
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Great Character Development
I felt I really got to know the mind set of the main character.
It all seemed very real.
Would love to read about these people.
I am one of those foot fetish husbands, & hence my name is
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Hey
It's totally my fault. I submitted my story in .doc format and Word inserted the hyphens at the sentence breaks which were in different places when it was posted. I should've just submitted in .txt format like I was advised. I only did it in .doc to keep some words italicized. There are also grammatical mistakes that are NOT in the version I submitted. I don't know what's up with that. I would be happy to make the edits myself, but I'm not sure how. Thank you so much for the feedback as I was wondering why it was being voted so low.more...
I'm not sure why
you keep throwing all those hyphens into the story. It's beyond annoying.
While I liked a lot of the aspects of your writing I would click off another one if it was full of hyphens like that.
Sometimes writers do that to keep it from getting scraped. It's unnecessary. There are better ways.more...
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