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With the wide dispersion of her troops and the imminence of the attack, as well as the secret nature of their plans, Jeanette did not have the opportunity to give a rousing battle speech. Instead, she spoke to units one on one, using the skills she picked up in the slums and commons in Ruar to relate to, and inspire hope and courage to the soldiers she met with. The battle would come tomorrow, and one way or another it would finally all be resolved.
- COMMENTS
kris10ealmost 10 years agoShe has strength and courage, and the ability to lead, but I just can't figure out how she just gave over her kingdom for some good dick! In many ways she is an awful queen, she shows this side of in maturity and submissiveness when she should be strong. I hate but love her! I do hope it all turned out good for her....I just don't see how, when she gave up her own son's rights and even her own, on a hope and prayer she herself is unsure of. And if he has other wives, how does she feel she will fit into a life of a submissive slave wife to the know conquering king and his first wife, his second wife....and so on.... smh!
Other than that....I am truly enjoying this story!
syd_v63about 10 years agoOk can't say I was a fan of the whole Sir Drake/Turogg conspiring duo. Nope didn't like it one bit, mad me angry and pissed me off. But what is a good story if it doesn't make you feel something and you really aren't concerned for the characters. So I was a little pissed and I got over myself. Good story none the less and your keeping it moving - Bravo
What I liked:
The fact that I got pissed. If I didn't care about the characters I would've just moved on. Not really a fan of those folks who claim they don't like a type of story or topic, read it any way and Bitch, Scream and name call the author or the made up characters (Really what hell it's fiction). If you don't like something move on there are plenty of other stories to read. So what does this mean, well for me it means I've bought into the characters (Job One of any Good author - Reader Buy. In). I didn't mind the sex scene although much too brief, but it again set the stage for the type of sexual relationship our two main characters have. I also like that Jeanette is a multidimensional character, sure she all passive and Sub in the bedroom but get her in the Throne Room and she's the Queen. Best paragraph of the whole chapter:
"It will be hard for me to produce all the children I'm obligated to under our treaty if you're out raiding villages, Chief Turogg." Jeanette tried to remain patient with him. She was already beginning to see that this arrangement wasn't going to work. Perhaps that was for the best, though. Yes, she could marry him, but he couldn't be King, in the sense that he would rule. She would have to bear all the responsibility as Queen. Then she could continue her program for Zentara, and have Chief Turogg.
In this paragraph we see that Queen Jeanette is just that, the Queen. She cannot and will not accept second place in the Throne Room or for her country, as any good Monarch she must put duty first. If she had just let this treaty run the show, the story would've lost all credibility for me and assume other readers.
What I didn't like:
I've said it before and I'll say it again, Literotica. The name of the website is Literotica and subsequently we expect Erotica. So where was it? It was marginally brought out in the beginning of the story. You gave us maybe eight good paragraphs out three whole pages. That boils down to less than a quarter of a page (1/12th of the story was sex). I for one am sitting on the disappointed side of the fence. So here is my demand to the author: beef it up in the next chapter.
Other than than couldn't have asked for a better chapter. Battles are coming, intrigue is happening, character development has progressed.
Five stars well deserved.
