- BDSM
- Paid Vacation Pt. 01
- Page 6
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Click hereThe girls soon settled down and went to sleep until they were awakened by Bob's call that it was time for them to go fix dinner.
- COMMENTS
Sir_Winston54almost 20 years agoHaving read a *great deal* of sexually-oriented books in my life, many of which were BDSM-related, I have to say that this is as well-written as the best, and better than many. The anonymous writer who called this rubbish apparently has no love of BDSM, or simply no taste - it's hard to tell which. I'm looking forward to Part 2.
(Incidentally, I did notice the "self possessed" and "below consciousness" phrases, but didn't let them bother me. I've seen *much* worse misphrasing - not to mention errors of fact - in many mainstream bestsellers.)
Overall, a fine read - one I'd be proud to have written!
Anonymousalmost 20 years agorepetitive and boring.... I don't know how I got through it all - I was uttterly limp by the finish
Sir_Nathanalmost 20 years agoThis is a great story and a solid '5'. I only have a couple of comments to make, but have to rush out and can't finish the story right now but didn't want to forget.
Here they are:
"They were all poised and self possessed." Do you mean self assured? If they were all self possesed, I wouldn't want to spend much time with them.
Some of this stuff is simple and beautiful: "As she fell asleep the thought of one of those men in particular left a smile painted across her mouth below her closed eyes." Just great.
"Just below their consciousness both Kate and Alison were aware..." I don't think so. One cannot know what happens below one's consciousness.
Otherwise, a great read!
Nathan
