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- Paying Rent
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Click here"Anything, you say. Troy." Dean smiled, as he offered Troy his hand. Troy tightened his grip, on Dean's hand.
"Go put this down, on paper. I'll be down, to talk to Sherry, in about an hour."
Dean smiled. "I can't tell you how much I appreciate this Troy. We will be forever in your debt."
"Yes, you will." Troy returned.
"Thank you." Dean smiled and turned to walk home. Troy watched his friend leave. He watched, as Dean traveled the two houses down the street, and into his home.
Troy entered his home, sat down, thinking, and smiled at the floor.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 18 years agoMost definitely, either learn to spell or get a good editor (or both).
That said, you have the basics for a most uncommon story line, one with much potential. Your biggest albatross is going to be the age of your characters (physical attributes, stamina, etc, etc). But the set-up is wonderful. This could go somewhere.
You can do this, quite likely in a most entertaining way. Just work on that mechanics of writing issue.
Best of luck!
-- KVK
Anonymousalmost 18 years ago"We don't have much, for retirement ether. And you know that I'm do to retire
I'm do to retire. It's due..This ruined it for me.
allforallalmost 18 years agoYou have a well laid out first chapter. Now you need to decide if you want to run with it.
