Playing For Keeps

But you need an editor, hun. Your punctuation is bad. :(

I loved it! Like just keep writing, cause your doing something right with your life, like....oh my god thank you

This is a really good start. You'd benefit from someone to line-edit, though, since you have a few sentences where the punctuation is off so it looks like the character is narrating that he or she said something.

that was good im likin it

Awesome non-human bdsm. Loved it.