Plush Princess

When I get the time to write again (hopefully sooner than later) I'm going to get that rewrite in.

Yep, There are plans for Rymur to appear in more stories as small cameos, often to explain why certain events happen. Too Many Drinks has some better description of him.

Honestly, too many people take criticism personally rather than for what it is.

Oh! Yes, I know that Patience is older than the princess because she bathed her. But Iu was more referring to the fact that that's the ONLY thing I really learned about Patience's appearance. I don't know her figure, her hair color, her species, and I only have a vague sense of her age as "older than the princess." That's more what I was getting at. Sorry for the lack of clarity!

Oh! Usually if there's stories on Literotica interconnected, there'll be an author's note at the start stating that there's a cameo, or just state that there's . I DID read "The Failing of Words" (and it took a third read before I realized Justin died in the expansion since I got to the end not realizing what happened to him XD), but I haven't read "Too Many Drinks" yet. Looking back at "The Failing Of Words," I think I see now that the man in the princess's diary is the genie. But aside from being green, I think the diary is a bit too vague for ease in making the connection that he's the same genie...

Still, a lot of this could be chocked up to my reading comprehension issues. And I really need to give you some major respect for handling this so humbly! I've been outright flamed for trying to leave some constructive criticism while still enjoying the story and pointing out what's good about it, so I tend to be... anxious about things like this. So, thank you. This is a weight off my mind. <3

@Cyberweasel89

Thank you for the feedback! I'm really sorry this was not to your liking. Reading it back, I realize I forgot to add many details about Patience. Like that her first name is Selina which is why her boss calls her that. Or that Patience is significantly older than Gaiana (although I thought the detail that she bathed Gaiana when she was younger was the clue).

As for the diary, um. Well, you can read "The Failing of Words" or "Too Many Drinks" for more context. I may have been a bit too ambitious in this regard. I'll have to reconsider many future cameos.

I'm personally quite proud of this story, but if people are having a hard time enjoying it, I should probably face the music and get a revised version out. It's no good if people can't understand it.

Again, thank you so much for the feedback. I don't get nearly enough of this and it makes it more difficult to keep writing in the future. If people are serious enough to leave a comment, it makes my day no matter the content.

It was good, and I enjoyed the boob stuff. Especially with her her boobs were so big she couldn't really move around on her own, but...

I don't believe Patience is ever described. It was mentioned she bathed the princess when she was younger. Is Patience older than the princess? And I think at one point Reserve calls her Selina?

The ending seems to leave so much hanging, and while I think that's fine normally, the diary part seems random and leaves so many questions that show no hints of being answered... I don't know if it's my disability causing comprehension issues, but this story just seems blatantly incomplete, even when you try to look at it as a story MEANT to be open-ended. It's the diary part with the green man that throws me off and makes me confused... In fact, if you removed him, I think it would improve the story since it wouldn't have something unrelated to the entire rest of the story thrown in with no explanation to cause unresolvable questions for the reader. I mean, if you want to do that, there's better ways than a random green man in a diary entry...