Revelation 02 – Friday

I discovered this story recently and although it was posted a long time ago, I can't resist to comment it. I liked everything except the Lars episode, which I skipped. I can understand those who think that the husband should be angry after his wife told him that she had been cheating on him. But curiously, as I understand the double standard shown here, it doesn't bother me as it would have done if she had cheated him with other guys. It has something to do with it my preferences in erotic fiction: lesbian incest and harem involving only one guy. When more than one guy is involved, it is a huge turn-off for me. Swapping and swinging involving more than one guy isn't really my cup of tea... Question of tastes.

you try too hard, include too much, and the added people do not bring additional value to the storyline. as the four of them are struggling to integrate their own lives you complicate it with extraneous fluffery that detracts and ditracts from the core grouping. the timeline is advertised as one day at a time, the days turn into years.

Just ignore all of the people who are commenting on the apparent 'evil' based on Karen's deception. I think most of these people have forgotten that these stories are fiction. Keep writing. I like this series!

I went back and re-read through chapter 2 ... very carefully... thinking I had missed some redeeming nuance to the ‘wife’s’ motivation in this unfolding relationship being presented to your protagonist. Unfortunately, I was correct in my first assumption that ‘the relationship’ he is being clued into, is based solely on lies and deception. His ‘wife’... and I use the term loosely ... developed two distinct sexual relationships outside of her marriage to him and the only reason I see that he is even being ‘brought in’, is that she doesn’t want to give up his dick. Did I miss something important? >>>> I also take major exception to your portrayal of the protagonist as nothing more than a ‘life support system’ for a penis (you know, can't think with his big head to save his life). >>>> A little known fact that appears to be overlooked by 90% of erotic writers, is that a MARRIAGE is based on absolute trust and completely open communication. This ‘marriage’... has neither. >>>> Your protagonist’s reaction to the ‘revelation’ is so diametrically opposed to my own, that reading any more of this tale is out of the question. It would seem like a total farce.

...you posted this line: "Slowly, some feeling came back then it flooded in and I realized that I loved these women as I never loved anyone before." What the flying fuck kind of a reaction is that? He's just been told that, One: His wife can't keep the intimate details of thier marriage relationship secret. Two: That his wife trusts his and her moms way more than she trusts him. Three: That his wife has just cheated on him with, not only her mother, but his as well. Then to top all this off, his bitch of a wife thinks that if she can get him 'hot' enough, he'll just skip over the 'thinking about it' part and head right for the 'I want to fuck you all' part. What fucking arrogance. ------ What I want to know is, where the fuck is the anger that this level of manipulation deserves? ----- You lost me as a reader at this point. Thanks for posting.