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- COMMENTS
BGunnsover 9 years agoYou took a great Lycan series with serious possibilities,and turned it into a stupid Hentai story with 3 tailed werewolves,and midget floating spirits. Basically,you made the story a cutesy,childlike story.....too bad all your readers are adults. -BGunns
Anonymousover 9 years agoFrom Ranike to Dog got your tongue and reading this series I have to say,You are an amazingly talented writer and it has been a pleasure reading the the stories. I look forward to more wonderful stories and new chapters of the current storties when you have the time to write and post them.
Anonymousover 9 years ago#1: two, to, too
They're three different words, with three different meanings.
'Too' is used to indicate an addition to something, such as "he hurt his hand too", meaning 'as well'.
#2: Commas.
For the love of Luna and Kurama, PLEASE use more commas. It can be rather difficult to determine the different clauses and groups of words in sentences which lack both commas and proper grammatical construction.
The stories themselves I love, but I cannot give them a 5* rating because of the grammar issues; they're too prevalent to ignore. I can only give 4*.
Omniferisover 9 years agoI loved this chapter. Can't wait to see what Dan does to the Red Kitsune tribe. And what rammifications of the Grey Spirit Tribe is going to be fod their cheif's actions.
Anonymousover 9 years agoIt is not just you, it occurs in quite a few other stories but more often in yours as you
have a fixation and continually describe what your characters wear. The garments that people wear are clothes - with an "e". Cloths are pieces of cloth that you might use to polish your shoes.
Apart from that, the stories are not bad.
