Sis-in-Law Pays the Price

Short but sweet

Theres a lot there compressed into a few pages. It would be better as longer story but its good and keeps you reading. I wouldnt worry about the haters, i can see why they wouldnt like it. Its not juvenile enoughmore...

Well

I give you kudos for your great stories so take my advice on this one - it sucks

WTF?

She made false decisions and fucked someone for a $$$ contract, and then she does the same with him, also for $$$?
I don't think this will work out, nonetheless i like her way to say sorry and thanks.

Seems like she's been paying the price from the word go. She unwittingly marries the type of bottom-feeder that would actually stoop to taking a girl to a pig-party. The type of man that would brush off her advice when it comes to his business, although it is sound and do-able and involves her quality of life, is no best-friend material. The type of slag that would sit at home and still expect her to cook for him when she comes home from work and then, after that insult, demand his daily bonk, is a bloody good excuse to start drinking. Hell, I'd even fuck his worst enemy and be able to blame it on him.

Great sex-scene though. Pity it's with a patriarch-fuck. Hopefully a character like him would realize she now doesn't ow him a cent. It's a great story and you're a brilliant writer. It's only that I've brushed sides with people like that and know how hard it is to get the smell out of one's clothes.

Shot for story. Sorry for getting so vocal, sorta. Just don't like patriarchal males (the characters, I hope).more...

Ugh

And more Ugh. Even a 1 is being generous.