Talla's Fallen Temple Ch. 12

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Instead, two more women entered.

"My Mistress needs to see her quite urgently," someone familiar was saying.

Maksa's ears strained and finally recognized the speaker as the Second of Pussy, a genealogist named Dol'ya.

"It will only take a moment to examine her," another woman said, her voice unrecognizable to Maksa.

"I was instructed that it was an urgent matter."

The guard coughed.

"It is a matter of Protocol," she pointed out firmly. "All upgrade recipients will be examined."

That seemed to settle the matter for her, and she did have the advantage of being the only one in the room with a spear.

"Oh, nonsense, Mara," the Sorceress of Facial sang out, never turning her head away from Maksa. "If there's something important happening back in Sweetness, we can examine Maksa later – or have someone examine her when she gets home. There's nothing in the Protocols that says the examinations have to happen right away."

The guard stuttered, caught between Protocol and the rank of the woman in front of her.

The Sorceress leaned in close enough that Maksa could see her face clearly.

And then she winked.

"You feel just fine, don't you, dear?" she asked Maksa. "Not light headed or anything like that?"

"No, Mistress," Maksa lied, unsure of what was going on but placing her coins on the side of the very convincing blonde woman in front of her. "Just fine."

"Don't speak anymore," Facial reminded her. "Let your throat rest. Now be off, the two of you. Hup, hup."

Dol'ya hooked Maksa's arm and swiftly led her out of the room, past the flustered guard and whatever physician that had been.

When she felt they were safely out of earshot, she leaned over to whisper to Dol'ya.

"What in the nine hells was that about?"

"Not here," was the only reply.

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xtorchxtorchalmost 11 years agoAuthor
It's good hearing from all of you

I appreciate the communication.

And I'm so glad you're patient with my rate of progress. I'd like to dedicate more time to my writing but I have to work with what I have.

Thanks again.

@XavierTorch

(P.S. Chapter 13 has been submitted. I'm writing 14.)

cittrancittranalmost 11 years ago
Hey, just because it takes longer, doesn't mean that we aren't happy with it.

After all, we've stuck with you so far, right? You must be doing something properly!

(Well, a lot of things, actually, but you get my point.)

xtorchxtorchalmost 11 years agoAuthor
It's a longer journey than I thought

I'll grant that much. I really thought that I could have finished the story I wanted to tell, of Talla and Zhair'lo, in one book. I think, now, as you do, that it will take three to get where I meant to go.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Hope you're playing a very long game...

Several chapters back, you mentioned the irony of erotica requiring appendices. I think that I'm probably not the only one who started reading this story because it was erotica but have become genuinely interested in these characters and this world. For me, this story is up there with "The Preacher Man" or "Angels, Demons, and Alex", the latter of which was taken down from Literotica and published online. Another thing that kind of intrigues me is that I get the sense that this story can't possibly be resolved in 12 more chapters. Fallen Temple is feeling more like the second book in a trilogy rather than the ending of a duology. Also, it seems like some characters from Book 1 have fallen off along the way, such as Sila or Shanata. In any event, I'm not here for the sex anymore. I'm here because you've created a page-turner.

cittrancittranalmost 11 years ago
O_O

I.

NEED.

MOAR.

NAO!

Okay, not really.

But I'd LIKE more quickly. This is damn good.

And if you'll pardon the terribad pun, I think you're a disciple in Within, because my head has been drawn into this.

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