The Commander Ch. 03

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We sipped our drinks a little more until Fiona started playing with the hair above my ear with her finger. It wasn't sexual, but it was very intimate. I kissed her softly, and we embraced clumsily for a minute with our drinks still in our hands.

When I finished my last sip, I gathered our glasses to the side table and returned to the bed. I rolled Nicole over onto her tummy, and started fondling her ass. Fiona guessed where I was going with this, and she came over, spread open Nicole's legs, and gently massaged Nicole's pussy while kneaded Nicole's ass cheeks. After enough foreplay, I kneeled behind Nicole, reached under her hips, and lifted her pelvis straight upward, putting Nicole into a doggie position. I rested my still flaccid cock on top of Nicole's ass. Fiona took the hint. She rested her head sideways on top of Nicole's ass and took me into her mouth.

As Fiona restored the vigour to my manhood, I reached over and picked up the packages of condoms -- Fiona had brought six of them -- bless her soul! I tore one pouch open, and pulled out the prophylactic. Fiona's expert oral attention had done its magic -- I was at full attention. I pulled out of her mouth, rolled on the condom, which did not reach the base of my ten inch pleasure machine. I positioned the tip of my sheathed fuck rod to Nicole's pussy. Fiona started sitting up, but I gently pressed her head back down on top of Nicole's ass, indicating I wanted her to stay there.

I gently pushed the tip into Nicole. The condom was lubricated, so it went in easily. I started fucking her softly, being careful not to bruise her with my ten inch rod. I was surprised how deep I could go. I nearly buried the whole ten inches before I grounded out. What Nicole made for depth, she lacked in tightness, as I noticed her pussy was not nearly as tight as Fiona's.

I pumped in and out carefully a few times, and then started fucking Nicole for real. Nicole groaned appreciatively while Fiona remained with her head resting sideways on Nicole's ass, facing me. After a minute or two of fucking Nicole, I pulled out and repositioned my cock to Fiona's lips. She anticipated this maneuver, and sucked in the whole ten inches without hesitation. I let Fiona suck me for a minute, then I returned to fucking Nicole. For the next ten minutes I alternated between fucking Nicole and getting sucked by Fiona. Every time I pulled out of Nicole and watched Fiona take me in, I was thrilled with erotic delight of Fiona sucking in Nicole's pussy juices.

Throughout all of this, Nicole's groans grew louder, until she started flexing her back muscles in the beginning of an orgasmic burst. I saw Fiona reach underneath Nicole and return the favor by squeezing her nipples while I continued thrusting deep into Nicole's quivering pussy.

A few minutes after Fiona exploded I felt my climax approaching. I pumped Nicole harder, probably slamming into her cervix once or twice, but she didn't complain. Nicole started grunting on each thrust as I increased my power. Nicole's grunting added one more input to my brain's pleasure center, and in seconds I felt myself erupt. I pushed long and hard into Nicole's pussy -- I was certain now I was pressing hard against the base of her vagina, but she still didn't object. I felt wave after wave drain into the confines of the condom until I was sure my ejaculatory contractions were over.

I pulled out of Nicole. I unrolled the condom, leaving the reservoir tip intact, and rested my bare cock on top of Nicole's ass crack. I pushed the condom inside out, draining my jism onto my cock, spilling some onto Nicole's ass. Without being asked, Fiona took me into her mouth and swallowed down all my semen, slowly pulling out with a tight seal with her lips, making sure my cock was clean. When she was done, she licked the tiny pools of spilled spunk off Nicole's ass.

I was going for a record tonight, and I decided to press onward. I told Nicole to roll over onto her back, and then I told Fiona to position herself on top of Nicole in 69 fashion. Then I told them the first one who makes the other one cum wins.

As I watched the two girls start to tickle and probe each other with their fingers and tongues, I retrieved Fiona's tube of K-Y. I slathered a good dollop on my finger, and then brought it to Fiona's asshole. Fiona gasped momentarily at the sensation, but then returned to her duties. I slid my finger in easily. I pumped it in and out a few times, and rotated it inside her hole to make sure everything was well lubricated. I had lost some of my erection, so I jerked myself off a bit until I returned to full size. Then I applied a thin layer of K-Y on my shaft, and positioned over Fiona's waiting rosebud.

Fiona moaned loudly as I pushed in. "No fair," she then cried. "it's two against one," implying of course that my welcomed anal stimulation unfairly assist Nicole in bringing Fiona to climax sooner. I replied by pushing all the way in, pulling mostly out, and then thrusting hard in and out. Fiona let out an "oh" on each thrust, intensifying my own trajectory toward semen launch. I hovered over Fiona's ass, pumping in and out while the two girls worked on each other.

Surprisingly, I heard vocalizations from Nicole as if she were close to her third climax. I tried pumping harder into Fiona, but I was already at capacity. Nicole began wailing as I watched her body cramp up into orgasmic abandon. The sight and sound of her climax brought me closer to my own, and I knew it couldn't be long. In the throws of her own ecstasy, Nicole had lost focus on her duties. Fiona wasn't close.

I unloaded into Fiona's ass not a moment too soon, as my legs were getting tired from this semi-squat position. I drove hard into Fiona, and let my waves of love fill Fiona's bowels. After I was finished, I retreated to the bathroom and cleaned off while I let Nicole finish off Fiona.

In the end, it seems some people are just better at giving girls head than others. Nicole was in the shallow end of that talent pool, as she didn't seem able to bring Fiona to climax in the 69 position. When I returned from the bathroom with a fresh, clean cock, I rolled Fiona over onto her side, and started massaging her pussy in the style I know always works. She smiled knowingly, remembering the last time we did this. I brought my cock to her mouth, and she rewarded me with a long, deep throat suck. I told Nicole to come over and kneel upright beside me. While I massaged Fiona with my right hand, who was sucking my cock, I sucked on Nicole's tits and fingered her pussy with my left hand. Talk about multitasking.

I focused on massaging Fiona, but I also allowed myself the pleasures of being sucked while fingering another girl. I could sense Fiona's excitement building fast -- while Nicole hadn't brought her to orgasm, she had carried Fiona more than half way. I slowed down my strokes against Fiona, letting my own arousal build before she exploded. Fiona let out a sigh of complaint as she sensed my throttling of her excitement, perhaps feeling frustrated after Nicole's fruitless teasing. I didn't care -- I wanted to time my orgasm with Fiona's.

Perhaps sensing my mission, Nicole reached around me and starting lightly scratching my back. I drew my finger out of her pussy and put it to her mouth, and I watched her take it in and suck her own juices off of it. Now I felt my own loins warming, so increased my massaging intensity against Fiona's pussy. She in turn redoubled her sucking action on me, and the runaway feedback loop began again.

I returned my left hand to Nicole's pussy. My right hand was getting tired -- usually I can reposition myself to relieve my hand, but my current multitasking posture didn't allow it. I soldiered on, determined to orchestrate another simultaneous orgasm. Fiona was doing her part, and my balls were roiling. I gritted down and increased my right hand tempo to high speed, pressing harder into Fiona's pussy. I was immediately rewarded by Fiona's hard breathing, which I now know is the precursor to her orgasm. I had forgotten entirely about my left hand on Nicole's pussy, so I digitally penetrated her again for good measure.

Fiona and I exploded together. This time Fiona went deep on me, channelling all my cum down her throat. Fiona's body was undulating with orgasmic energy while I let out a low, ecstatic growl. Our collective excitement caused Nicole to sympathetically dig her fingernails deep into my back. Only after my orgasm subsided did I realize I had savagely driven my middle finger deep into Nicole's pussy, and that may have explained why she dug her fingernails into my back.

After our waves of pleasure subsided, we all disentangled and collapsed on the bed.

I needed one more to break my record, but Fiona asked that we stop. She was spent and tired. I asked her if it was OK if I did one more with just Nicole. "Go for it, Big Boy," she offered.

I lay down on my back and asked Nicole to get on top 69 style. She wrapped her thighs around my head and started sucking me until I regained my full girth. I then told her to turn around and fuck me. As she was turning around, I reached over for Fiona's condoms. I slipped on the second condom of the night. Nicole rode me while I played with her breasts. After a few minutes, I told her to 69 suck me again, and I had her alternate between sucking and fucking me.

One time, just as Nicole finished fucking me, she reposition herself to take up the 69 role, but this time Fiona jumped in and sucked me, taking Nicole's place on my cock. Actually, what Fiona did was first remove the condom, and then she sucked me. Nicole sat on my face while I tongued and fingered her pussy. Fiona stayed on my cock until she brought me home. But this time, after I came in her mouth, Fiona pulled Nicole off my face, lay her down on her back, and kissed Nicole long and hard. As I saw the spunk ooze out of their mouths, I realized Fiona was snowballing my jism with Nicole.

We were all tired. I kissed both girls tenderly, and then we pulled the covers over us, and the three of us, with me in the middle, fell blissfully asleep.

End of Part 3.

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wyoboy67wyoboy67about 8 years ago
SVirgil....truth, loyal and honest?

Great story!!!

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AnonymousAnonymousabout 10 years ago
Great!

The story seems to be progressing, but there are a few things that aren't clear enough. I thought the Commander (Don, or Jet, or whatever the name you will use for him from now on) could only mind-control other people in such a way that they are practically puppets, and that they will just sit or stand dumbly unless he tells them what to do. That's the impression I got from the previous chapters. So, what did he do to Nicole? And what will happen when they all wake up tomorrow? Will his control of her disappear during sleep?

Now, another thing. Your way of explaining how mind controlling works is somewhat technical. If the main character starts developing new abilities, then it would be awesome if you could make it gradual and (and this is VERY important) to write the Commander's own impressions and inner thoughts on the matter.

Now that I think on it, that's it! Those impressions and inner thoughts are what lacks in this story. Not too much, you understand, but since this is a first-person narrative, it always helps if a reader can connect with the main character on a personal level. Therefore, some personal, emotional thoughts, views on broader spectrum of things... I mean, what does he feel of Fiona? Is it infatuation, is it love? What? Except for awesome fucking, we don't really know.

Now that I think about it, there never was any character history. When did he develop his powers? How old was he, how did it feel for him? Us readers are hungry for this, and erotica is more than just visualization of good sex, but of emotions, too. He was already like 50, and he had had a life. Was there someone in his life long ago that this new girl might remind him of?

Look. This new body he has acquired... it is basically a new beginning, a reincarnation of a sort. It is something all of us dream. Write of it. Write what he feels like now. You see, even sex scenes - which are pretty good, except that I find it just a bit weird for that gender-bending thing - even sex scenes can be enormously better if you employ the emotions he felt toward his partners. I mean, what's the point of doing a total stranger (no matter what body he's wearing) if it is just for scenes of fucking, and to point out that he can? You might argue that he did it "so the other person might have something to remember", but what did it do for Him (the Commander) exactly? It never says. If it did, if you had taken a time to develop it story-wise, then it would be more cool than it was. But such things take time, so next time you write something, don't jump into it immediately like you did.

So... If you improve on these aspects: his mind control, his inner thoughts, his emotions, his reasons, and the new beginning of his life - then this story, or any story you might write thereafter, will develop a life of its own, and there will be people screaming at you to update.

Does this seem like too much? Too overwhelming? Yeah... but nothing's worth doing unless improving. And another thing! Literotica authors practice something called re-posting - it's when they go back and re-work old posts into a better version, the one that tweaks all the kinks. Keep that in mind for later times.

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