"Good thing it grows back. Well, you can't say I don't try new things. What about you? Are you planning on going all naked around the house now?"
"Nah. I don't know how you do it. It feels all weird and ugh being all out there."
Diana raised her hands over her head pushing her breasts out. "I can't tell you how alive it makes me feel to be on display for you and you enjoying the show. But I'm glad you won't join me. It is definitely more exciting being the only one nude. But I wouldn't mind seeing my new friend occasionally."
Diana and Matt looked down at Matt's penis.
They both watched as Matt's penis jerked and lengthened as blood rushed back into it and it grew with excitement.
Ah to be so young and virile thought Diana.
Diana pushed him up out of the couch, "Besides I want my encore performance. I'll even help you clean up the place after."
Matt grinned "Deal."
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I do not mind the pace of the story.
As long as you can keep it erotic, then I don't mind the short episodic chapters. My only problem is with the ass to mouth after anal sex. Even in a fantasy one has to be aware of the hygiene risks that this poses -- especially with concern to e-coli (which can be very deadly). Well, that's my two cents worth.more...
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You know - 'quantity dictates quality' has never been a conversation I've ever had with any of my publishers or editors. I absolutely can agree that length, either plus or minus, has a huge sway in reader preferences and as you've mentioned I prefer reading shorter erotica - when I read non erotic then I like it longer. Another thing I'm very aware of is I was/am writing this episodically. Traditionally, before writing this I was very much an outline/plot planner - I knew the beginning, end and all major points in between before I started typing - but for a NaNoWriMo a year or two before I started writing this I wrote in an episodic manner and had a lot fun with it. When the Deal first hit me, and I decided to branch out into erotic writing I let it be loose and episodic - letting the story take me wherever it wanted to go. I've had a blast with no regrets.more...
Go big or go home.
You're clearly an amatuer write in your spare time person. Your stories promise a deep plot but fail to deliver and are quite frustrating because they lack depth. One or two paragraphs no matter how long do not count. I've read a comment by one reader that told you he'll not reading anymore because they're so short. Your response was i like short stories. Which is a tactful way of admirring a lack of creativity. Writers take into consideration the targeted audience.more...
Tantalizing chapter
But like you said. I don't know how Matt can resist touching her.
Response to Ironman52
Thanks for the great comments. They really do have no idea and that was what gave me the most fun as a writer - trying to get a grip on logically where were their heads and why. The deal started with three simple rules and look where we are already. As Diana develops we (myself included) learn a lot about who she was and who she became after her husband's death and how now the two personalities are seriously wrestling inside her head for dominance.
Thanks again - I thoroughly enjoy your (and others) weekly comments and always look forward to them.more...
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