Five minutes later Jacques appeared followed by Rachel. Obviously I was the last person they thought they would see and when I walked up behind Rachel and called her name she nearly jumped out of her skin.
"Come to gloat, have you," she snarled after she'd recovered from her fright.
"No, no I just wondered if I could talk to you for a minute." Jacques had stood beside her and placed a protective arm around her shoulders. "Alone." I added.
"You've got one minute," Rachel said before turning to Jacques. "Organize the bags and a taxi please. And get it right this time."
I smiled on the inside. Pointing to the table I'd just left I led her to it. She waved the waitress away when she approached and then looked sternly at me.
"Well, what is it? I've got a plane to catch."
"I just wanted to say goodbye and... I'm sorry for the things I said in France."
"No, you're not." Rachel said brusquely.
"Actually I am. At the time I was very upset, but you know... the children and everything. I didn't ever want it to get that ugly."
"Well it did, and now you've won, so congratulations." She began to stand up.
"Come on Rachel. Can't we just let this go?"
"What do you want from me Jeffrey? Do you want me to say it's alright? You've left me on the rubbish heap but you're riding off into the sunset with your new little tart?" She shouted.
"You and I have very different definitions of a rubbish heap!" I replied getting to my feet as well.
We stared at each other for a moment as the security staff gathered discreetly nearby and other patrons swiveled in their chairs.
"Goodbye, Rachel," I said bitterly, and strode out through the lobby.
In the back of the taxi on the way back to the bar I reached into my pocket and pulled out an envelope. On the front it proudly stated it was supplied courtesy of Pepper's Gallery Hotel. Opening it up I pulled out a cheque made out for Rachel to pay her two and a half million dollars. I stared at it briefly before I began tearing it into tiny pieces and putting them back in the envelope. I'd tried, but her anger had buried my sympathy and beaten my sense of fair play.
As I walked to the table I could see that Charlie and Jackie were onto a second bottle of bubbles. Charlie saw me approach and jumped up to give me a drunken cuddle.
"You okay now?" She whispered into my ear.
"Yes."
"How did it go?"
"Not as well as I hoped but probably as well as I should have expected."
Charlie pushed back and held me at arm's length so she could look at my face.
"What's that mean?"
"Hmmm," I thought for a moment. "Let's just say that little bit of me that might have still had some feelings for my ex-wife died and maybe that's about the best closure I could hope for."
Charlie watched me warily.
"Where's my glass? We're celebrating aren't we?" I said smiling broadly.
The girls squealed loudly and filled the empty glass on the table.
"A toast," I held my glass up. "To the future."
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Got to say that
I liked the story pretty well. Not everyone is a Rambo type. Some people just want to get from point A to point B with the least amount of friction possible. And that's okay. Story was fairly long, as has been pointed out by an annony or two but I found it to be a good and easy read. Thanks for sharing your story and you talent with us.more...
ok
I was going to give it high marks but i gave it only a 3.
There was to many things unfinished. You created these characters then never said what happened to them. I really wanted to know what eventually happen when the french/dutch took her to the cleaners. She never got what she deserved. Did he marry charlie. Etc.....more...
yay
love that she got all that she deserved... and that he got Charlie into the bargain... thanks for an awesome story. Night
More was need
Your ending is good you spent a lot of the time covering the body of the story. For the ending not as much coverage there. I can only speak for myself. What happened with the rest of the family. What happened with David. What happened with Charlie. What happened to the PI and the honey trap woman. Something really bad to really needed to happen to Jacques. He made a good choice not to kick the weasels sneaky butt, I'm sure Jacques would try to sue him. The ex-wife didn't know how to shut up and try to listen. After all those years of being married to that man she knew he wasn't there to gloat. A closing or an epilogue could wrap up some of unfinished items. It's your story I'm fairly sure you wouldn't want me to finish the story. I'm kind of violent person and love giving bad people hurt and lasting pain to remember. So much pain that they never attempt to try and deceive anyone again. No matter if deceivee tried to allow that deceiver to take advantage. Okay, I like punishment with blood, gusts, broken bones and a lot of begging and crying. (Which his sneaky ex-wife and her weasel boyfriend needed)more...
Loose ends
We need an epilog or aftermath or whatever to wrap things up.
Something like...
Jeff pursues fraud charges against Jacques and his brother.
They decide to disappear after cleaning out Rachel.
The get a high risk, high interest loan against the villa and steal the rest of her cash.
(With no remorse of course since she already started to treat Jacques as disrespectful as she had Jeff.)
Rachel cannot pay the loan and loses the Villa.
She needs to borrow money from her daughters to return to Australia a broken woman who will rely on the alimony from Jeff until it finally runs out and she is forced to take a job as a cleaning lady.
Jeff marries Charlie, raises David to be the son he never had and they live happily ever after.
That about covers it, yes?more...
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