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Gobin spoke to his brothers through their mental bond: "Brothers, she is right, we must be careful with her, especially around other empaths, because she gives off powerful emotions naturally. Lezar, I will need Kalba's strength as an anchor if I am to dispel these emotions. Ilan, we need the cushions and furs, I fear we may be here awhile, Helius, I need you to see what she sees. We need to find what horrors are still haunting her. Let us hope she responds to my purrs, or we may have to wait till we find Ara back home."
The brothers knew that while Lezar had the highest rank, Gobin was their healer, and a healer knew best for wounds of all types. They did as he asked, and hoped Alza would respond to Gobin's purrs.
- COMMENTS
MM_slutover 4 years agoI really enjoyed it. I didn't understand all of it, but I'm sure I will in later chapters. I love how understanding her new owners are when it comes to her health
Lotherielabout 10 years agoAs others have said, this story is reminding me strongly of STTS, but that is not necessarily a bad thing! STTS is a fantastic story, and the first chapter of this is an interesting set-up of the same basic event but with an unique angle. Nancy is a competely different type of heroine, with other challanges ahead of her.
As for the (few) haters. Did you not notice that DrWolf commented as well, in a positive fashion? If HE isn't screaming "plagiarism", then what gives you the right to? If using a similar set-up would not be acceptable then 9/10's of all the sci-fi and fantasy novels in the world would never have been published.
Vampychickabout 12 years agoIf the idea was original I would have enjoyed continuing but the fact that this plot is parallel to Slave to the Servants. It is not okay to copy the ideas of others even if you try to change details( and truthfully you didn't try hard)
Lo_Panover 12 years agoReally badly in need of a good editor. I suppose you already have one, but he/she shouldn't be allowed within twenty feet of a new story!
livnthechilifeover 12 years agoI agree with you. Anon nitpicked to the extreme. It is your story. If you want monkeys from Mars to speak Chinese, play bass guitar and have god like strength you can do so. That is why you are the author. I admit that I started reading this becuz I was bored. I thought it was too close to Slave to the Servants. I am guilty of judging your story by the title. I decided to stop being a butthead and just read. I can honestly say that I enjoyed this first chapter. I will now continue to read until I catch up and am sure I will continue to enjoy it. While I love doctorwolf, I will not demean either of you by comparing . I think you both are talented. Thank you. Kick rocks anon.
