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His first spell didn't just make him invisible; it affected whatever object he touched, concealing and creating illusions to hide any changes he made, like footprints. These spells were more than just bending light. It seemed like they were two halves of a single spell.
When he wasn't training, Noah went around town to gather information about the country, magic, and monsters. Unfortunately, the results were far from bountiful or reliable in a little backwoods village like this. He would have to move to a bigger city to get better-quality information. The Utheric capital would be his best bet, but it was weeks of travel, and preparations had to be made for a journey like that.
Try as he might, it was hard to remain unnoticed. Rumors about him circulated through the town, with people he had never met knowing his name. He would walk down the street, and women would wink and blow kisses, even trying to seduce him. Men would smirk and nod in approval as they passed by to display respect. Even the old lady at the pharmacy would tease him. When Tin went out, she'd wear a hood to conceal her identity. It wasn't an ideal situation. If he was to be known throughout the village, he wished it would be for something a little more heroic.
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darussian13 days agoIt’s an interesting idea so far. Could use.. a lot of work and sadly the second is definitely worse than the first. It’s cool though, all skills need practice, even writing. Feels like some people need a reminder that they’re on a free site reading free stuff. No one is saying it would be good, just gotta get through some sad stuff sometimes. Anyway, keep it up! 2*
BarryAllen8883 months agoI’d have to disagree with an anonymous comment from 3 years ago. It’s NOT cool that this reads too much like a play-by-play of a video game. Margaret Weis & Tracy Hickman’s Dragonlance novels do not read like a D&D session, nor does Andrzej Sapkowski’s novels read like you’re playing the Wild Hunt. After defeating a monster, do you think Jaskier asked Geralt if he leveled up?
Also the section where Noah was describing CPR really sounded wooden and awkward. If he’s this badass main character who’s had LIFETIMES of experiences, he would have caught on how to talk to people of different universes in a way that they’d understand. “Cardiopulmonary Resuscitation” sounds ridiculous in this setting.
grizxabout 2 years agoThis is my second time through, and am still enjoying. The story is more polished than the average fare on this site and I wonder if I will soon see it gracing the pages of Amazon like so many others that got a good start and a base of followers from Literotica. Then again it's exactly the type of story I look for on Amazon. Giving it 5's so far just for quality and content.
