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Celeste had a hand to her mouth at the sight of sudden violence, her feet rooted to the spot. I gave her a nudge to snap her out of it. We stepped over the bodies and continued on. She obviously understood me; it caused me to wonder why the old man spoke an arcane language requiring an interpreter earlier. More subterfuge from the Temple of the Rhinoceros? Maybe they thought they could keep the Sheikh off balance more easily, or just wanted to get a good look at Vananella, the only woman in our party.
They tricked us from the start.
- COMMENTS
Doombot80about 1 year agoIt's heartbreaking that this story ends here. It's so interesting and full of likeable characters. So much potential.
Anonymousalmost 2 years agoEnjoyable read but disappointed that the story is unfinished. More would be welcomed. Thank you
Anonymousabout 12 years agoIf you're still active, you have to continue writing this. It's really good and I've sat
here reading it for the last 4 hours. This has a great storyline, and a lot of potential.
I don't know how long you've planned this to be or if you're even working on it anymore but if its short, we need to learn more about Walker's past. Just a small bit. Perhaps that 'small bit' that entices me into continously reading for these 4 hours is enough until a chapter or two.
You've had really good character development during the whole story so far, and the plot makes sense within the story. I feel that Walker should be more distressed with the situation he's been thrown in, but perhaps he doesn't have time to think because he's occupied by so much?
This story is thrilling, it keeps me on edge and makes me want to read more. Bookmarked.
Anonymousabout 14 years agoGreat composition skills, wonderfull and original plot, good characters! I do hope your muse will move you in the direction of a concluding phase to finish this real treat of a story.
Thanks!
