Lamenting her failure to grab her phone when she'd fled the room, she had no idea where she could make a call from, and when help would come to her if she did. Katie didn't even know where the 'check in' area was, and she wasn't going to explore a large property she knew nothing about, when there were two predators on site who knew the place like the back of their hand. Remembering her predicament prior to arriving at the ranch, she realised calling the police wasn't an option. She'd have to conceal herself somewhere overnight, until the staff were back on site.
Bursting out of the lift, her bare feet rapidly padded along the smooth floor as she ran across it, peering through glass doors for an adequate hiding place. There was no point screaming for help, she knew everyone was gone besides the two owners, and her call would just alert them to her whereabouts. As she searched for a safe spot, she thought about her strange hosts.
'Maybe they're serial killers,' she considered, looking through one door which led into the gym. There was was always something predatory in Mark's eyes when he looked at her, but in her suite his gaze was absolutely terrifying, as though he was bordering on some kind of sexual frenzy. Recalling their latest encounter, Katie shuddered. Thinking about the circumstances which led her to the ranch made her grit her teeth. When she'd first arrived at the ranch, she was of the belief that things were as bad as they could get, but she was wrong. Silently she cursed her unreliable car, cursed Mark and Cory for perverts, and cursed Marco, the only person that evening who seemed genuinely concerned for her welfare, for leaving her alone with them.
She gasped as she heard the lift hum into action, the digital indicator showing the elevator travel upwards and settle at her suite level. Whimpering in fear and uncertainty, Katie dashed along the room, until she came to the door right at the end, farthest from the lift. It was an indoor swimming pool. Would they look for her there? The lift was moving down and there wasn't enough time. On impulse Katie ran her card over the handle and exhaled in relief as the door bleeped green.
"Fuck, fuck, fuck," she whispered anxiously, lightly hopping from one foot to the other as the door clicked closed behind her and she gazed around the pool area. It was a 25m pool, and the turquoise-blue water reflected the pattern of the tiled-ceiling on its still surface. There was a Men's and Women's change-room, and a large sign right at the other end of the pool that read 'Sauna'.
If she hid in the sauna, she'd be trapped like a rat. There was obviously nowhere to hide in the pool unless she could hold her breath indefinitely and magically keep the water surface from rippling. The Women's was a typical retreating point for scared females. No time to ponder, Katie darted into the Men's.
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these guys are creeps
especially Mark. I hope she kicks him in the nads so hard he has to adopt.
@BELLIE444 YOU ARE SUCH A TEASE!!!
Please continue!! This is such a well written story ^_^
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I am very pleased with the first chapter of your story. I like the intrigue created by having her mysterious secret that keeps her from contacting the police. I can't wait to see what she needed to escape while only succeeding in being caught in another traumatic situation. It was very refreshing that she wasn't suddenly finding the situation pleasing just because her body started to show signs of arousal due to direct stimulation. She refused several offers of alcohol and kept her wits about her and is a fighter. She makes a worthy opponent.
However, It would have been better if the two men had been the only people present when the last employee left though. I surmise that she was already sufficiently freaked out by that time that she would have alerted the waiter and he could likely see her unease. Also there should have been a bad storm that made cellular reception in this rustic mountain retreat impossible and trudging back out onto the road in the hope of finding another motorist or reaching the closest town or nestled neighbor unlikely.more...
Horrible place to end it.
It was very good writing no doubt. It would have been so much better if you had posted the second chapter as well or just added more.
interesting...
Though good as an outline or rough draft. There are too variables and open issues. Some of the play/challenge between the two men needs to be better understood. Either more outlined or parts of their "sports" need to be rehashed. As for the great unknown of living in the middle of nowhere, the the author stated that the men have met business relations there at the ranch, that remove the remoteness as now investor or high rolling business persons would not be without internet and phones. So even if she left her phone behind (almost believable) there are phones in each room, the store that she locked up would have one, and hallway might just have a in house phone but with assistance could get an outside line. If she was already on edge it might have still slipped out that no one know where she was but I doubt it as she would have been formulating a story that mapped out the route she was taking. And why not ask for a ride from the waiter, or the first guy, if it was an issue of cell use. Why not use the hotel phone just to call her family or what not. I mean she goes to her room for a quick shower and dresses in the new dress but does not use the phone or internet or does not go back to the lobby to get her phone though she is creeped out by mark. She even thinks about the bad moves, stated to Mark that it is not worth it...meaning she will report rape. So what do they kill her in the end? Too many holes...not able to suspend disbelief.more...
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