"Helen, I had a great time. I'd like to do this again sometime. It's been good to find my old friend again."
She had turned her head a bit and I couldn't see her eyes. When she turned back, they were filled with tears. She hugged me tight and, standing on her toes, whispered in my ear.
"Tom Davis, I was a foolish and stupid woman once but never again. I will always love you and if there is a god above, someday, you'll take me home."
With that, she turned and ran to her room closing the door behind her. I stood there for a moment realizing it wasn't a déjà vu and contemplated going back for her before grabbing my coat and letting myself out. I knew I'd be back again.
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I Respectfully Disagree
I take umbrage to the statement that people who believe in the "Burn the Bitch" philosophy have, quote, "never smelled the odor of the bitch burning" and that "it destroys people including the one who lights the torch ". I don't know if this gross generalization is courtesy of the character or the author, but either way it is a
freaking crock of shit. There are women, and certainly men too, who so flagrantly destroy their marriages that they deserve nothing less than being burned. And in some cases, possibly literally as well as figuratively. Am I cold? Yea, probably. But you know what they say, Once bitten, twice shy.more...
It seems to me that had her lover turned out to be the great guy she thought he was, she never would have regretted dumping hubby.
Liked it but...
I gave it three but you are throwing him into the jaws of those mentally ill.and soul diseased couple, David and Marylin.
This will hopefully not go the same disgusting direction their story went.
Re-Reading
As someone said in the first chapter, Helen walked out of the marriage with $600,000, and has a job. I would feel NO obligation of any sort to give her more.
“I really liked this woman. Did I believe her?” – I would believe her. First, she told you the story about going to her mother BEFORE she knew you were suspicious, second, there was NO hesitation as if making up a story on the fly.
“It destroys people including the one who lights the torch.” – Maybe you don’t have to “Burn The Bitch”, but that doesn’t mean you have to take her back, either!
PLEASE, a lesson on the usage of quotation marks: When a speaker’s quote goes beyond one paragraph, you put a quotation mark at the START of the quote, and leave it off at the end of the paragraph. You put a new mark at the start of any subsequent paragraphs, and a closing quotation mark only at the end of the last paragraph of the quotation.
I repeat my comments from 12/23/15:
“she flashed a clear beaver shot at me” – I’m sorry, but that’s a little pushy for a “just let’s get together” dinner.
Her slipping into his bed naked isn’t EXACTLY “respecting his virtue!”
I'm sorry, but if he wants to maintain a cordial relationship, for the sake of the kids if nothing else, fine. But he is an idiot if he takes her back. He should make that VERY clear, and then move things along with Janet.
“I knew I'd be back again.” – I HOPE you just mean for a dinner or a “date”, and NOT a reconciliation!more...
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