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Of course, I have to take this moment to also thank Garbonzo. The man works hard to find the mistakes I make, as well as enrich this story.
I know there are a lot of complaints about the amount of time it takes me to put chapters out, or even how short they are. All I can say is that I'm trying. Like I said, this takes a lot of time out of my busy life, and I'm not getting paid to do this. I do it because I enjoy it, and I hope you do as well.
- COMMENTS
DBs_Broabout 1 year agoAuthor@WretchedMonkey
This is some great criticism. And I have to agree with you. Even though this is on chapter 28, I was still a learning writer. I think (hope?) my writing and character development gets better in the other books, but I know I still struggle with maintaining a characters current emotional state, as I sometimes have to take long breaks between writing. Thank you for your input.
WretchedMonkeyabout 1 year agoI have to say that I've been binging on this story for a while now and I've found it enjoyable and interesting but it's just whipping away now for a number of chapters without really engaging me. It seems there is always a sex scene in every chapter whether it needs one or not and you've moved away from the core group so much so that I'm losing the will to care. Angela's left, Lisa died, Brooke's getting ignored and Lyden is fucking dragons and near-deities with barely a thought about anyone else. His emotional flip-flopping issue I'd previously just ignored, but having a lover die and then just be flirting/quipping with someone who isn't even one of his girls (Jennifer) just seems off. There have been repeated instances of him being at one end of the emotional spectrum one minute and then jumping to the other the next moment, usually facilitated by sex of some sort. It's jarring. I've seen plenty of people compartmentalise but it's usually with a very business-like attitude in order to get stuff done, rather than slip into another emotional state. When your emotional compass is pointing a particular direction it's very hard to change it but easier to just not look at it and feel 'numb'.
Ramjet57over 2 years agoI must say, those that complain can stuff it. I am truly enjoying this story, It is complex and well written.
Anonymousover 4 years agoNow that's a powerful orgasm! May the power of life flow through all of you.
Anonymousalmost 5 years agoI'm greatly enjoying your story, so far. Well written, and interesting...please continue!
