'Hasn't she read my letter? Doesn't she understand how much I want this? Her? Us?'
Ian mumbled some excuse to his mother to get away and think. He walked out of the living room, down the hall and into the pool room. The indoor pool had been built for him as a gift when he turned 10. His mother called him her 'water baby,' because that was his passion. No one seemed to understand the reason behind his infatuation with a body of water. For when he threw himself into the water, all of his worry and stress where gone. Instead all he felt was freedom, the weightlessness in his limbs. It was just liberating. He wanted to experience that feeling more than anything at that moment. Running his hands over his face, he tried to rein in his temper.
'I don't understand. Why doesn't she see? I'm the man that loves her. I'm the one that she should talk about to my mother. ME!'
Ian blindly struck out; hitting the dense wall. It cracked a bit, and small paint chips fell to the floor.
'Fuck, mama is going to kill me for that.' He resigned himself for the long scowling lecture he would receive. Then to the fact that she would be sending him out to the hardware store so he could fix the damage.
"Before I do anything else. I first need to have a long conversation with a certain someone." Marching out of the pool room, he headed straight for the den.
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So what?
I wasn't going to say anything but guys please stop with the editors and stuff... Its notlike you don't know wat she wants to say..
Please Proof
As a someone before me stated, think about finding an editor. Keep a close eye on if you're using present or past tense.You seem to use them interchangeably-- especially in Chapter 4/5. Sometimes it's as if things have already happened, and we're hearing about them from a second party. Sometimes it's as if they're happening in the moment, and we're experiencing them first hand. You often mix up words like to and too or admission and emission. Inconsistency appears in this chapter. One moment the men are in the den playing hockey, and the next, Samantha is saying she hates soccer. Just get another set of eyes on these before you post. It's always easier to edit someone else's work than your own. The story is intriguing and holds weight. Just work on the grammatical errors.more...
Absolutely love it!
Don't leave me hanging! Please update again!!
Love it!
But Sam is really starting to piss me off. Sam talks about Ian playing games, yet she does the same thing. She knew nothing good would come out of her bringing Calvin to the party. She obviously has no romantic feelings towards Calvin and is just using him to piss Ian off. She and everyone around her knows that she wants Ian. With her delyaing how she feels makes things worse for not only her but Ian. She needs to stop acting so childish and stop playing games. As for Ian he needs to take a step back and let Sam get herself together. At every turn he is trying to show her how he feels and it just ends with them both being more confused then. before. But I do have to say he is maturing and actually trying to make things work with Sam. You can tell he truly loves her. If he doesn't tell her about Kristie then Sam will be more hurt and upset. Ahhhh love this story!more...
Wow, please update soon...
Sam should not have done that, she knows that she wants Ian and not Calvin. Ian went about things the wrong way, he should have told her from the beginning how he felt. She knows how she feels and she should have told him, she should tell him now. He needs to talk to his Dad. His dad is going to hip the mom to what is going on, I am pretty sure mom will be getting involved and that should be pretty hilarious. PLEASE UPDATE SOON!!!!more...
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