No writing this weekend for me, I'm attending Anime North for the first time in ten long years. However, if I get my fraggle rocked by a cute cosplay girl, I'll be sure to write about it.
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A Good Beginning (Sorry)...
You probably won't read this since you have already posted the next chapter, but I wanted to comment anyway on what I thought about this one. Confusing (I hope so)?
Who wouldn't want to go back in time and fuck a hot teacher if given the chance (unfortunately none of my female teachers were ever that young or that hot [although there was this cute young thing that taught female physical education that all of us teenagers of the male persuasion were lusting after])? Not that this was a totally new idea, of course, but the way it was handled was (mostly) believable. I enjoyed Becky's reactions throughout the initial visit and liked the way the humor played out. I also liked the interplay with the Men in Black. You have a good ear for dialogue.
There was the occasional gaffe with pronouns and some problematic grammar but I overlooked it because the story, itself, was so interesting (and let me make it perfectly clear that I don't read a lot of stuff at Literotica because some people just simply have no inkling what good grammar and punctuation use is all about). I'm actually looking forward to the next chapter to see where your warped sense of humor is going. Good job, and I'll probably comment on that one as well (I don't think you'll need a time machine to verify that).
By the bye, I don't think it was such a good idea of the Men in Black to tell a horny teenager what he can't (or mustn't ) do with the time machine. I guess they don't know the history of our time all that well after all...
Rogermore...
Jeez, BH, what is it with you and Anonymous dickbags?
The guy above who couldn't follow it gave you one star? I feel sorry for his tiny brain trying to follow Pulp Fiction, no wonder he couldn't handle your story.
As for those of us with functioning lobes, I quite enjoyed the story and found it easy to follow. The sex with the teacher was hot, the interview with the time agents seemed reasonable enough and clearly Mark has more shenanigans planned.
Looking forward to another uniquely enjoyable story. Don't keep us waiting long!
- Corimore...
Oh one more thing...
Enjoy your weekend and Good Luck.... ;-)
As Usual...
BiscuitHammer, as usual you did it again, at least for me. I love the beginning of this series and like you mentioned am looking forward to Alex and Alexa and hopefully Michael and Lynn. Please keep up the great work, and as the old saying goes, see you in the funny papers....more...
from the.....
The title of Chapter 1 almost had me thinking this should have been in Horror instead of Humor.
No matter how trustworthy he looks never give the monkey your pistol.
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