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"Goodbye Sir," I murmured, my eyes closed as I enjoyed his warmth. It took a moment for what I said to sink in, but we both stilled at the same time. My eyes shot open, heart stopped, and my whole body went into panic mode. Before he could react, I tore myself from his arms and was out the door. I didn't stop until I'd flown through the front door and was standing, trembling, next to Drell's horse.
Shit.
- COMMENTS
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoLOVE THIS STORY!!!
Please continue and finish! I hope you release more chapters in closer time range instead of releasing a chapter evey several months. This story has so much potential. I love where it is headed now.
Anonymousalmost 8 years agoI neeeed moreeee
This is so good im actually sharing it with my friends its so good. I hope you are actually a wroter because you deserve to be paid for the quality of your work.
MastersWenchalmost 8 years agoThanks for all you've put into this story so far! Very enjoyable! I can't wait for another 'fix'!! :D
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Anonymousabout 8 years agoI've read all 7 chapters so far. I like it very much. I like the creative setting, even though I often do not like magical fantasy. It isn't overdone, you keep it interesting. I like the characterization. It clearly has plot, but it needs more emphasis on the structure of that. I'm not sure if you have a theme, although as porn in may not need a point beyond a story; I think you are capable and would like it better if you did. I enjoy the length because you are using the length to develop it. This is working well enough that is justifies waiting to read, and I hope you feel it justifies all your work. I'd suggest that you go deeper into her mind about what it means to her to have just enough pain and just enough dominance, and more detail of her enjoying that or not, blow by blow. I'd also suggest expanding his character to put in more detail of his enjoyment of doing that. It is clear you have more in mind on those things than you are putting into the story, and I'd like to hear it. Overall, well done. I await more.
