Valeriya The Half Breed Ch. 01

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Shortly after the final word had left my mouth twin beams of blue light struck me. My legs gave out and I pitched forward into the sand as the security operatives stunned me.

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GrantLeeStoneGrantLeeStoneover 3 years ago
Great Action

I enjoyed the detail in the fight.

Looking forward to reading the next chapter.

kitty_siamkitty_siamover 3 years agoAuthor
Show don't tell

Dear Anonymous,

This is the way I write, if you do not like it... stop reading my stories. Perhaps you would enjoy something else... like a comic book with lots of pictures?

Anonymous complaints suck,

~ Kitty ~

 Anonymousover 3 years ago
Show dont tell

The fight scene was nice but too detailed

The rest was just a lot of inderect exposition that doesnt innvolve me as a reader

EclecticReaderEclecticReaderover 3 years ago
Welcome back!

I totally enjoy your work. It is detailed and realistic. The references to current day culture are perfection

Thanks for sharing your imagination and story telling skill.

 Anonymousover 3 years ago
It is nice to see a female protagonist

Great start. I will be looking for more of this story. Keep it up. The USAF Brat is a great addition.

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