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"No, he'll throw everything off. Don't let him help..."
Ghost stared at the painting that was in the scroll. He would have called the subject a Vampire with an AK47.
Merrath stated, "A large number of Human Dread Bloods have been teleporting into towns all over, ripping them apart, and turning many of the populace into Dread Bloods, who disappear."
Wanderleaf continues, "The only clue is this odd weapon. If we can find the source, maybe we can find where they're coming from."
Merrath shakes his head, "It's not finding the sorce; we all ready know it."
Ghost got up and went to his back wall, which was covered with green growing plants, stuck his arm between a poison spewing, flowering bush and a beautiful thorny vine that could wrap it's victums up, neither of which happened and yanked out a box that was too big to go between the plants. Soon after he set it down he flipped open the lid and pulled out an AK47.
"The source is my world; all we need to find is a Who. And I believe that who is an Assassin!"
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- COMMENTS
Anonymousabout 2 years agoI really enjoyed this story and plan to read the sequel. I'm saddened that there is only one. Your plot and storylines are awesome and very interesting. It is easy to suspend disbelief. That said, the main weakness in your writing is subject verb agreement, usually were a verb tense is concerned. Occasionally, you use possessive cases improperly as well. If you work on these aspects your writing will reach another level of believability as each time you err in these areas it seves as a distractor that your audience must stop and consider before the flow of the story can continue. Please keep writing. This is good stuff.
Sincerely
The Infamous Anonymous
Anonymousover 12 years agoa fun read, with a different and engaging plot. there were a few errors, but nothing too distracting. i'm left with the thoughts 1)when's the nest chapter? 2)what is the rabiteen seer worried about ghost throwing off?
Anonymousover 12 years agoI really enjoyed this story. And while there are some errors, it doesn't really make the story difficult to follow.
PS - love the screen name
