Carmen looks conflicted.
"I'll work on it," she offers. Ashe accepts that. I think she still believes Carmen's crazy, but a manageable crazy. I'm praying she's right.
(Two Years Later)
I'm walking onto the porch when Carmen opens the door. Even when I'm early she always seems to know when I'm coming up to the house. She has little Steven on her hip and a broad grin on her face.
"Was he any trouble today?" I ask before kissing my wife and tussle my son's head. He bats at my hand and giggles. Carmen hungrily kisses me back telling me with her body that today's been a good day.
"He's been an angel, like his father," she smiles. "I can tell by your face that you have good news." She knows what it is but allows me my moment.
"I got the fellowship grant. I'm going to get my doctorate," I crow. Carmen hugs me. She knows that getting my doctorate will most likely lead to a teaching position at the college, which will mean staying in the house and home forever.
"I have good news too," Carmen responds. I let her have her moment's hesitation before she continues. "Ashe is going to do her residency at the County General Hospital. She'll need a place to stay until she gets enough for her own place."
"And?"
"I told her I'd have to check with you, but I sort of promised her a room. That way she'll get to spend time with her godson," she grinned.
"Which means we'll have a few nights to ourselves," I tease.
"Only if you want to," she acts demurely.
"I want to ..." I smile.
"I love you Rob," she says.
"I love you too," I respond.
FIN
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Fucking weird
I don't know how I felt about that story, but it was weird
An interesting story, but...
there were too many mis-spelled words, grammatical errors, use of the wrong words in places, and some other errors. Fortunately, tho they caused me some breeches of concetration, they were not enough to make me stop reading. I finished it in one sitting (unusual for me) and enjoyed it very much.more...
Good story but..
It was a good story and I like your writing, but the end just threw it for me. Having a girl you barely know kill your best friend, probably grounds for a break up. Not a sigh, well shucks I guess that's okay. Otherwise a good storymore...
The Mother
Actually, I never got to cover that, but here it is now. There is a passage way from the basement to the old garage in the back of the house (really big backyard) that is basically used for storage in the time of the story. The Mother was wounded in the blow up during the robbery years ago. Carmen helped her Mother into the passage way then abandoned her to bleed to death. Also, Carmen's grandparents were Grifters and thieves. They used Carmen in their schemes, something she really didn't want to do, which was another betrayal.
Running around and playing in that old house was the only good time Carmen had in her life. She didn't know her Mother was casing the place for the robbery later. That's why she comes back. She finds Rob in 'her' room, so she becomes obsessed with Rob. When Rob shows up to save her from the rapist at his party, Rob becomes the only person in her life that cares for her - in her mind. Thus the story begins.
Lastly, the Detective wasn't clueless. He was sympathetic to Carmen's plight. Not only did this horrible thing happen to her in the house, she was sent to live with criminals (her grandparents) who were just as bad as her mother and there was nothing he could do about that back then. He may be behaving poorly as a police officer, but it is out of his desire to give Carmen the break he couldn't give her earlier.more...
Awww... I want my own little stalker.
Good story... but where's the body of her mother? She was 12.. I'm assuming that it can't be too far away, but burying her somewhere near the house would have been too obvious for even the most clueless detective. So perhaps she didn't drag her mothers body, maybe she chopped it up and stuffed it into the chimney?more...
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