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I enjoyed the story very much.
There are always going to be people out there who will criticize grammar and spelling. This is the internet. Brush it off and keep doing what you love. :)
wow..
NewWriter2012.. i just love this, m names Jessica ******* and im a 17 year old hih.. i had the same experience with my dad and it just got me so deep.... and im not just talking about the story ;) Anyway your grammer may be a bit off but it made me feel like you wrote it like you fucked your daughters cunt while writing this.more...
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Your grammar is atrocious; I spent so much time correcting and reconstructing in my head what I thought you were trying to say that I started to lose the will to live. Spell-check is not all-knowing; if you have no idea about grammar (as you clearly don't), it's not going to miraculously correct and re-present it for you; as this stands, it reads like it was proof-read by your 12 year-old sister with ADHD after she chugged a fifth of Jack D. You need to get a real editor, someone who's not going to give you an easy ride because they're e friend of yours, in fact, get two; one to correct and audit your grammar and spelling, and another to sanity-check your story, because that wasn't so hot either. I gave it one star, because this is a terrible waste of your time and the 5 minutes of my life it took to read in the hope it would somehow miraculously improve before I gave up.more...
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