I guess you werechannelling your feminen side when you created your girly man forestry clown. I kept expecting to hear Monty Python's "(... He's a lumberjack...)
I cut down trees, I skip and jump
I love to press wild flow'rs
I put on women's clothing
And hang around in bars..."
Hell, I'd have done the same thing to him if I were her. He's a niave wuss.
But hey, I'm really happy he could channel all those nice fuzzy female feelings he was having for most of the story.
single star
PS: Yeah, it was so terrible that I did resort to skimming through the pathetic parts.
I like the theme, the discovery of being a submissive feminine gay.
But the execution of the idea isn't up to par. For instance you give the character such a complete not-knowing about himself but also a way of dressing and behaving that is about synonimous with faggot in society. Looking and acting like what you describe he could hardly have not known, either by comparing himself with media or by his peers telling him. (just remember that a few times you're almost stating that being like your guy is, is the same as being gay, and since that is not true you might get negative reactions)
Also I like the part where they meet and talk. The sexscene is short but nice too, only the lack of preparation and stretching, the lack of safety... No condom, no lube but a bit of spit, meeting a guy and funcking him in the middle of a club where also his friends are partying..., It's hard to imagine a virgin would loose his inhibitions and precautions so fast and accept the amount of pain of an almost dry deflowering.
On the part of the dominant male I only dislike that he left your guy naked on the floor of a partying club. Not just because it feels so like an asshole to me, I do get that it might be part of his game, his way to make your guy feel his higher position. But it doesn't really match up with his care and interest during the meeting, the talking and the feeling eachother up.
I do like your way of writing, describing and the idea. I hope to see your next submission!
Which is a rarity in this category. But, I'm really undecided about how to score this story. I'll give you an example of something that bugged me, ""Of course Karen, but am I not too old for you?"
"No, you are not." ???
Maybe this is just me, but without contractions it reads like some line Spock would Pontificate - Just saying!
(P.S. I think I'll give it a good score - just because I enjoyed the read :)
Thankyou for another great chapter. I thoroughly enjoyed reading it.
I love lactation stories.
This woman reminds me of myself, as I dress like an upscale businesswoman for work, but at lunch, I am busy expressing milk from my 38DD's. I am seriously going to miss it, as when I am nursing, I can have an orgasm! Of course, if I could find a dairy to accept me....lol!
Also, I love the non-consent aspect of this series, which to me, makes the story twice as hot (and I don't usually read that category)!
Continue forever please! Thank you!
Princess,
I have never read any other stories, so many times, since I have started visiting Lit.
Great, enviable writing skills, along with deep insight to predatory male and submissive female sexual instincts.
Kudos to you.
Kinky
A man wallowing in his despair and not moving on with his life. Sure, it hurts and that's normal, healthy, even. I'm not denying that. Nor is BTB (bitch or bastard) necessarily always the best policy. But what is the best policy is to move ahead and accept things in life, take a few chances and move on. Why not Venica, huh? Why shouldn't Francis have gone for the woman who really cared about him instead of that self-absorbed, narcissistic hypocrite who accused him while being guilty herself?
But to be fair, carvohi sadly captured how some folks do handle this....weakly, passively, and with despair. People really do wallow in self-pity and achieve nothing until something or someone gives them the necessary swift kick in the ass. Just doesn't have to be everyone, as he seems to suggest.
For some strange reason I didn't want to like this series... i skimmed through the first chapters and it seemed too "science-fictiony" for my tastes. But I decided to read it fully and, damn, now I'm hooked in as deep as the fiber's from Quinn's medical cuff. Each chapter is enthralling as the last and my only complaint is the shortness of the chapters and the fact a new one isn't posted every day. Thank you for the update and I can't wait for the next one!
Called it, da drugs strikes again. Still interesting read though.
Very entertaining story I really liked this story. Thanks for sharing
But the last couple of chapters need some editing. I am not talking typos but passages where it is difficult to figure out who is doing what to who. At one point you have Angel talking to Angel.
Even in a no-fault state, the division of property would be half the marital assets. That's half of whatever they had accumulated during the marriage. They'd met two years ago, moved in four months after that and married six months after that. That's a whopping fourteen months of wedded bliss. If his business accountants were any good, they could easily come up with spreadsheets to show that the $10,000 he gave her plus whatever clothes and personal property he let her take with her was half the value of their marital assets after the legal costs of the divorce.
Please finish your UNFINISH STORIES you left ?????? Christian Sex College,What My Brother left Me?
Good story.
When using old english the quote would be "Thou hast done well...Thou hast found the strength....untill thou canst wield them..."
Use thy as "Thy will be done. Thy powers are complete...."
Whatever. Interesting story line. I think there is room for more than 1 story about a guard at a womans prison.