Uni student writing stories in his free time. Made the mistake of going straight for the sex but now will focus on the narrative with sex being part of it. Any and all feedback is appreciated. EDIT: Thanks to an angry reader I'm going to change this; I appreciate positive feedback like any other writer and I appreciate negative feedback that's constructive to my work. However if you're offensive for no reason to me I'm going to ignore you and delete your unwelcome comment. Which I can do since there is an option to delete them so it's not illegal, don't hide behind anonymity to bully people and not have the courage to have a civilised discussion. I've got plans for future stories but nothing concrete yet, watch this space or tell me which characters you'd like to see again. | 
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