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no man is one
nor an island
they say
but a rock
is no man either
I learned this
today
not every stone
hides a diamond
at it's core
and nor all rock
is sprung
from the same
golden ore
a rock
draws no breath
and even those few
that hides
what we seek
will not let it
shine through
no man is a rock
they all bleed
just like me
but somebody
please
tell me why
they should be
I like your writing, but this poem reads like it might have skipped the editor's desk.
"and nor all rock"
I might suggest "and not all rock" or "nor is all rock"
"at it's core"
"it's" should be "its"
"that hides"
"hides" wants to be "hide"
"tell me why
they should be"
Your last line ends in an ellipsis ("a rock" is understood.)
If you were to change "they" to something like "that" it might make a stronger/broader statement.