- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Dank Undergrowths
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Silently, walking in quiet corners,
slithering
nicely
along corrugated walkways
sometimes the flapping of
a butterfly wings
mesmerizes
then
often
they serve merely to feed
denizens of the forest,
cackling underfoot
as the growth lies high
and dry
baby eels, slugs
of multitudinous colors
why is He enamoured
of all that glitters,
partake
some of that lies
deep in lissom depths
clammy and cold was His heart,
she left it bereft
and then
along came a spider
who gobbled like a turkey
re-gurgitated Him
whole and born anew
- COMMENTS
LeBrozover 16 years agoThis poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 37,000 poems.
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YDDabout 20 years agoYou use interesting words as usual,
but I too find the contrasts of your images rather disconcerting and contradictory.
You want the undergrowth "dank" (with "corrugated walkways"),
but make it "high and dry".
I pity the elvers who live underwater and the slugs who just squoosh and don't cackle.
And I just don't know what "lissom depths" are.
WickedEveabout 20 years agoI like this poem but "who gobbled like a turkey" suddenly took away the dank undergrowth feel of the poem.
Perhaps you could change the gerunds "flapping" and "cackling" to flap and cackle.
