coyote call

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I've heard them call across the sendera
a lovers note that sails on the wind
cloaked by night they call to each other
across the cactus at coyote bend

desert moon seductive and bright
where stars seem closer in cluster
sets the stage for the king of blues
the coyote in all it's luster

short chop barks then one long song
another starts up and a duet is sung
a quartet begins as two tag along
the nightly coyote call ... begun

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LeBrozLeBrozabout 17 years ago
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Concur with earlier comments. To fix, move the apostrophe from it's to lovers and that only significant issue is resolved. Very nice character piece.

WickedEveWickedEveabout 19 years ago
nice poem

I agree about changing it's to his.

ReltneReltneabout 19 years ago
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I agree with the other comments. You might consider changing "it's luster" to "his luster". You avoid the apostrophe problem that way, and I think humanize the coyote some more.

foehnfoehnabout 19 years ago
Good!

I've heard that ritual many times. "Sendera" - path, trail. Good, unforced rhymes, although the last stanza with all the "ng" endings jangled a bit. (I wondered if you could have found words ending in vowel sounds, like "o" or "u"...)

I think "lovers" should have been "lover's" and "it's" should have been "its." But you've written us a very good poem!

sacksackabout 19 years ago
I liked this.....

Good imagery, you didn't seem to be "fishing" for the rhymes which often detracts from a poem of this nature. Be careful of it's/its....otherwise effective!

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