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Sketches…afternoon
Somewhere along the way…
I lost myself in her
woken from a reverie…
realizing I exist no more
breathing only through her
feeling only through her
knowing only through her
living only for fleeting moments…inside of her
Is this death? perfect union?
only madness…enduring aberration?
taking flight on her every sigh
tears falling from mine eyes for her sadness
laughter swathing her glee…
there is no more me
the two joined as one? No…she exists
with or without my being
but I…am nothing but an ephemeral phantasm
winking in and out
to be lost on a breeze when her eyes close
minutes turn to hours…hours to days
since I lost myself in her
Once her sexual wares have been discovered ~ sexual addiction sets in ~ I have lost myself in her. Illustration certainly bears out the meaning of this rendering.
the same savagewolf I know?? I enjoyed the poem and found the sketch to be a great picture as well as an addition to the poem.
Very nicely done
Perhaps a bit too heavy on the hers;
Keep it light and subdued
In the style of that excellent illustration.
Sketches…afternoon
Somewhere along the way…
I lost myself in her
woken from a reverie…
realizing I exist no more
breathing only through her
feeling only through her
knowing only through her
Sketches…afternoon
Somewhere along the way…
I lost myself in her
woken from a reverie…
realizing I exist no more
breathing, feeling, knowing
only through her. - Maybe?
I think there were too many "her" words in the poem, and you could've done without them. The ellipses didn't seem to bother me much but I'd try to go for the right punctuation. The poem has great potentional and I enjoyed. There's only a few things I would work on. Thanks for sharing! Beautiful picture!