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grasping starlight with hopeful eyes
through the milky way which has been my life
wondering if heaven is beneath my feet
wishing for a shooting star to scar the night
perched on the edge of a full moon river
a pin head of knowledge of the vastness of space
like a flower in an enormous meadow
gone like the night, erased

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LeBrozLeBrozabout 16 years ago
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This poem was mentioned in the Archival Review thread, in a picking through Lit's archive of over 38,500 poems.

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champagne1982champagne1982over 17 years ago
why?

I wish you'd explained why the milky way has been your life. Your poem really doesn't expand this metaphor and hence, leaves me curious. I do like the word choices and line breaks.

Thanks for giving your poem to the masses.

Carrie

Brilliant_mistakeBrilliant_mistakeover 17 years ago
Brilliant

I cn see myself in the very same emotional position, and have a time or two in my years. Well played, well written sir.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
I liked this, MET

and mentioned it in New Poems Reviews.

AnonymousAnonymousover 17 years ago
am thinking I could have wrote such

and yet...you did it so well...big smile..blue

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