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Click herezmp~ rock garden
Granuals of sand upon a table's top
scattered along a box's fence
harvest rows in meticulous miniture
stillness in perfectly rippled dunes
surrounding islands of various polished stones
an endless sea of artistic possibilities
place-setting Earth's life-less beauty
hand and rake over the Rock Garden
Grains of sand across a table's top
scattered from the box's fence
formed in meticulous miniature
stillness in perfectly rippled dunes
lapping isles of polished stones
in endless possibilities
from a finite sea
a place setting of Earth's lifeless beauty
hand and rake over the Rock Garden
Honestly I think it great hubris to rewrite somebody else's work, but as somebody else did it once already in these comments, I found it working in my mind. I hope you aren't offended. Only you know exactly what you were evoking, the rest of us only reflect.
Very lovely work. :)
Grains of sand across a table's top
scattered from the box's fence
formed in meticulous miniature
stillness in perfectly rippled dunes
lapping isles of polished stones
in endless possibilities
from a finite sea
a place setting of Earth's lifeless beauty
hand and rake over the Rock Garden
Honestly I think it great hubris to rewrite somebody else's work, but as somebody else did it once already in these comments, I found it working in my mind. I hope you aren't offended. Only you know exactly what you were evoking, the rest of us only reflect.
Very lovely work. :)
.........the Zen Master paints a peacceful image. Nice.
Tess
but I believe this poem is a little complicated in word choices. Perhaps pare down; make the beauty its 'zenplicity'.
Isn't interesting the things you can find in nature and apply it human instinct/thoughts? Good poem idea.
Du & WE make excellent points;
I've tried 3 times to read through this
And each time got hung up on the very first word ~ granules.
Still, it's loaded with excellent lines and phrases.