La Vieile Dame et les Pigeons

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Interesting it is to see
Pigeons all flocking and flying.
Concrete scattered with yellow seed,
All the simple birds start vying,
Watching those little pellets flee.
The soured bitty wants them writhing.

Concrete scattered with yellow seed,
All the simple birds start vying,
The once sweet lady is quite keen,
But birds have no clue she’s crying
Watching those little pellets flee
The soured bitty wants them writhing.

The once sweet lady is quite keen
But birds have no clue she’s crying
She lets the little pellets free
And birds flock a woman dying
Watching those little pellets flee
The soured bitty wants them writhing.

She lets the little pellets free,
And birds flock a woman dying.
She cries alone at night, but see,
She cries for the pigeons complying.
Watching those little pellets flee
The soured bitty wants them writhing.

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normal jeannormal jeanover 14 years ago
I think

it might be a sestina. Ange would know for sure. It is interesting, but I have always found that form sort of "forced." But hey, I have tried and couldn't even get a forced sestina out of myself. I compliment you on this achievement. I don't know if there is a syllable requirement, but in some spots, it is sort of out of meter.

It is an enjoyable read. Looking forward to more from you.

EroticOrogenyEroticOrogenyover 14 years ago
Nice job on form & trigger

Enjoyable read - glad only title French!

WickedEveWickedEveover 14 years ago
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I really love this one. I know the form but can't think of what it is at the moment. Anyway, wonderful writing.