- Erotic Poetry
- Erotic Haiku #3
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Click hereone purple petal
all that is left
when she is gone
- COMMENTS
KOLKOREabout 14 years agoMy attention was drawn to the one petal. At happier times of budding relations one may be left with one petal, hopefully wondering: loves me? <P> kolkore
jthserraabout 14 years agoNick Virgilio's haiku should break as follows: lily / out of water / out of itself.
jthserraabout 14 years agoover the use of purple here. I think if you mention a purple flower you can create the same emotion without intrepreting the moment for your reader: "an iris petal" or something like that.
for example, in Nick Virgilio's haiku
lily
out of water
out of itself
he doesn't mention the color of the lily but the image you see is the single white lily. This is his best known haiku written for his brother who was killed in Vietnam.
Once again, a very good haiku, one of the better ones posted here at lit.
jth
jim
