Embracing Them

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vrosej10
vrosej10
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They live small lives, mice.
They groom their tails like eating corn, fight, hide to eat,
I guess that they love each other because they sleep in little piles.
They live short lives, two years at most and it is a risk to get attached
But as I watch them pair up for a run on the wheel
I realise that all our attachments are finite
And I will love them for all their short lives or risk loving no one at all.

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Esperanza_HidalgoEsperanza_Hidalgoabout 14 years ago
I think

the comparison in the last line is strong Rose.

WickedEveWickedEveabout 14 years ago
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Good poem but it needs to be tightened up some. Here's a quick rewrite to give you an idea of other ways to handle the poem. Hope you find some of it useful.

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Mice live small lives,

groom their tails, like eating corn.

I guess they love each other

because they sleep in little piles.

Mice live small lives

with risk of attachment, but I watch them pair up

for a run on the wheel and realize

that all our attachments are finite.

I will love them for all their small lives

or risk loving no one.

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