Cold , Gloomy Inertia

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Ashesh9
Ashesh9
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In the geography of the mind ,
     Cold ,gloomy dullness
Remains behind
      Unwillingness to move
No thought to find
      Mirrors outside matter
Snowfall en Himalayas, depression mined !
       But wait , hope flickers , a spark shines
Intelligence lives , mental gears grind
       Information is gathered, strategy tune-fined
In the geography of the mind , in the geography of the mind !!

Ashesh9
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todski28todski28almost 11 years ago
Glad I took a look

At some of your work. This is brilliant

greenmountaineergreenmountaineerabout 11 years ago
In the geography of the mind

is a great line, particularly in the context of what follows, worthy of repetition.

The poem is well done as is, so please don't misunderstand the following suggestion: If I recall correctly, you have an interest in things Eastern. Consider extending the narrative another stanza and bring the mind full circle to a point of mind at rest; use the "in the geography of the mind" a couple more times, turning it into a mantra in a matter of speaking. Then the poem functions as a meditation culminating as a peaceful state "in the geography of the mind." In fact, if you could sustain the narrative for two stanzas instead of one, that would even be better.

Again, just a suggestion. I enjoyed the poem as written.

SweetOblivionSweetOblivionabout 11 years ago
NICE HIGHS AND LOWS

A great contrast to offset the emotion - well done. S.O.

HarryHillHarryHillabout 11 years ago
Depression

never looked so good

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