- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Regrets...
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Then there is death. Supposedly I'll go
before you – will you grieve when I am gone
or secretly feel glad because you know
your privacy no more intruded on,
no more annoyance at my looking wrong,
no more hot anger at all things missaid
when you forget I ever gave them tongue
and no more awkward fumbling in our bed?
If haplessly you'd be the first to die
will I be inconsolable, and stare
at nothing while I hurt my hands and cry
because the loss is much too hard to bear,
or will I sit there with a bitter grin,
reflecting that I lost you long ago
before life even managed to begin -
so that not even this could hurt me so?
- COMMENTS
twelveooneabout 11 years agomaybe im reading this wrong, maybe its just me, do i hear acid dripping.
Killer jump start of a line, 5ed, well crafted and all that, but i hear overtunes, nuances, that etch some of the drippyness with acid.
5ed,5ed,5ed
greenmountaineerabout 11 years agoAs always, nicely done. The contrasts and the balance between them made the poem a good read. I might suggest that for me, the rhymes got in the way. There were a lot of hard sounding consonants throught the poem. While maintaining the meter, I think more assonance would have made the poem better in those lines where tenderness was emphasized. I think maintaining the rhyme scheme precluded that.
erectus123about 11 years agoso well treated. very nicely done. a little more development would be super, maybe a little crafting of first line but still very good
