- Non-Erotic Poetry
- Cedars
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There's a cedar in my garden -
somehow I always thought
it should be in the Lebanon;
My friend agrees it ought.
But then, it seems the cedars there
all die and come to nought.
They're felled for firewood or burnt down
in all those battles fought...
They should have spared those cedars
and my friend agrees they ought.
- COMMENTS
Maria2394about 11 years agoeven with the ellipses. I don't usually care for rhyme, in a couple of places it seems forced, but the poem overall communicates a lovely message in spite of the battles fought. I enjoyed reading this :)
Angelineabout 11 years agobut I really like this because it's short and seemingly unobtrusive until one sees the larger antiwar message and recognizes the extended metaphor. Reminds me of Emily Dickenson, sorta. :-)
A little awkward phrasing here and there to me, but tinkering would fix that. The repetition of the "ought" line is really nice.
Just one opinion & ty for a read I enjoyed.
