Waiting for the Moon

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HarryHill
HarryHill
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The sun's path, inexpressible ecstasy,
a lattice work of clouds
lies in sun kissed departure;
one, that resembles a giant bird,
flies to the east
leaving the others behind.

The trees become crisply cut stencils,
paletted in dark shades of thalo,
painted against the light holding sky,
delineating my heaven and earth,
hiding the horizon.

and as phrases bounced from mind to pen to paper,
I thought about you,
and was quiet.

Days fall continued sans observation,
security lights lit, solars glowed,
lightning bugs mimicked technology;
dogs barked far away.

in an instant
it becomes too dark to write,
futile scan of the sky,
then remember the night two days past
when the moon was Artimis
over the hill to the south
clothed in sheer robes
of celestial cloth,
reclining on a blue bed, satisfied,
torn sheets around her supine form,
salvaged,
from the thunderous orgy of copulation,
at the hands of still unsatisfied lovers
going down in the west.

Full dark now
she peeks over a towel of trees,
teasing me with a glimpse of flesh,
then drops all pretense and rises
to greet a star that's not a star
shining above;
and I am silent again my love.

HarryHill
HarryHill
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buttersbuttersalmost 11 years ago
creates that sense of waiting

lovely title, lovely writing, yes you could afford to pare it back some but it leaves behind that sense of quiet and stillness. always a pleasure,

a fan ;)

Leah32Leah32almost 11 years ago

Poetry at its best!

sandybsandybalmost 11 years ago

Very romantic, lyrical and expressive, but I agree with Anon, strip it of the non-essentials, too wordy.

AnonymousAnonymousalmost 11 years ago
Bravo HH

This is really beautiful but it needs the Senna Jawa treatment - remove all non-essentials, So for instance.......

"The sun's path, inexpressible ecstasy,

lattice work of clouds

lies in sun kissed departure;

one, resembling a giant bird,

flies to the east

leaving the others behind.

Trees become crisp stencils,

dark shades of thalo,

painted against the remains of light,

delineating heaven and earth,

hiding the horizon."

You should be proud of this, one of your best.

Tess

erectus123erectus123almost 11 years ago
excellent

this is what poetry is....

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