O'Hara

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A hard little pain had started in her heart and was traveling up slowly towards her throat where it would become a lump and the lump soon will become
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todski28todski28over 10 years ago
interesting stucture

I think the and's in the first and second break the sentences in half

acting like internal enjambment??

killamaidenkillamaidenover 10 years agoAuthor
efharisto para poli

:)

Oldbear63Oldbear63over 10 years ago
Nice

You caught the emotion beautifully. I can almost see her lips start to tremble

LesseloovesPeterLesseloovesPeterover 10 years ago

Very descriptive, can almost feel it myself.

twelveoonetwelveooneover 10 years ago
I don't know what this is

but I like it

the sentence travels poetically

and title, enigmatic

5 if you must know

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