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Click hereTrembling fingers
in fidgidy hand
sheets like a beach
forever sand
castaway in a room
like a deserted island
uncertain course
like jaws of a lion
soft eyes whimper
an inferno's fire
hands grip tightly
like pinching pliers
burried into each other
like stone thrown to sea
gentle kitten's purr
scratching wildly
crashing waves dance
like a wild horse's mane
lovers feeling game
like a hand in the flame
two hearts together
like a hummingbirds wings
sandman calling
like water down a drain
flesh meld together
like a heated oven
all in the flame
of a little bit of loving
without comparing the rest of another, TK U MLJ LV NV
I think that this is one of your better efforts. The only thing that scratches at me is your use of "like" in every stanza. You might want to think about reducing the similes, replacing with a direct metaphor, or at least try an "as" every now and then. :)