- Non-Erotic Poetry
- A whisper in the wind
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Click hereWhispers in the wind, winds
Float on skimming rivers, frothed
cups of latte, heavy sludge laden
spills coating membranes.
wishing tiny trails, nicking
soft silences, making cadenced music
marching bands do better,
caterwauling tomcats sing
to the moon flexing their prowess.
Wafted sounds minnowed mewlings,
softly voiced whimperings
He slept to these as she
stayed at the foot
lulling him as always.
- COMMENTS
annaswirlsabout 15 years agoMentioned in the New Poem Recommendations thread: http://forum.literotica.com/showthread.php?p=30341931#post30341931
Epmd607about 15 years agohad some fresh ideas, quality lines, but the poem as a whole sort of felt too crowded. If you're going for word sounds I'd make certain changes, if you're concentrating on images I'd go different as well. It's rare we can have both at the same time, so I think that's my only helpful hint, go all the way with sound or lighten up the sounds and hit with imagery.
