Ballad of Captain Hook

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Who thinks of villain, Captain Hook
as motherless young man?
Or as unwilling scholar, enrolled
As an Eton Oppidan?

His favorite, Shakespeare, turned in his grave
as stories closed “the end.”
Jolly Rodger, poison spider
were his only friends.

Sent to sea by slave-trading Pa, he
killed the captain, then Crook,
murdered the quartermaster with
his first metal hook.

Bartholomew Quigley Smeethington
(generally called “smee”)
Hook's boatswain kept ladies on the clock
but did his jig for free

When Crook arrived in Neverland
he met young Peter Pan
who promptly scoffed his grown up ways
by slashing off his hand.

Eaten (with watch) by a crocodile
(ff you prefer a “crock”)
Who savored the taste of Captain Hook
and sang a "Tick and Tock"

Black candle curls, a feather hat,
a rather eloquent man.
His main mistake growing up and then
returning to a child’s land

Did Crook or Smee even have a chance?
They too were motherless boys
who longed to be kissed goodnight,
and played with metal toys.

To despise or pity Captain Hook?
Depends who tells your tale.
But it’s too late to save the child
And as a man, you fail.

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Another one of my horrible Survivor Poems:
Form T: Ballad
Trigger 10: Crocodile

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tazz317tazz317almost 12 years ago
WHEN SEARCHING THE FRACTURED TALES

peter pan isnt. TK U MLJ LV NV

AngelineAngelinealmost 15 years ago
Hey, I gave it a 75

and the reason why is the phrase "black candle curls," which is perfect. The rest, uh not so much. I know you can write a totally kick ass poem on this subject should you a) choose and b) not be constrained by Survivor. So get your points and don't sweat it.:-)

normal jeannormal jeanalmost 15 years ago
it pains me

to see you leave a double naught on your own work. I personally love ballads and found myself attempting a tune with this one.

I thought this was very creative and I do not recall you having written a ballad before now, so congrats! You could tweak it a teeny bit, but what struck me was your empathy for cold blooded killers and thieves.

Thank youfor sharing your soul :)

annaswirlsannaswirlsalmost 15 years agoAuthor
good lord girl have you no shame

bwahh