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Click hereBeat beat goes the heart
A new day is dawning the the sunbeams one by one douse the darkness. The world is all anew. Once again the Prince of Darkness regress into his layer. Defeated by the divine. Shall await his next victim
Beat beat goes the heart
No longer One day closer to death but one step closer to destiny. For promises made are promises kept. Head held high so proud and true.
Beat beat goes the heart
Pitter patter Pitter patter the heart beats on. Passion and desire stoke the flames. . Words like music we hold to every note. Eyes focused , they hold the power searching ,hoping , yearning.
Beat beat goes the heart
Fluttering with anticipation
Today is here fresh and new. No more hiding no more lying. Bright is the promise no longer on the path to destruction. Set before us our destinies intertwined. We chose to walk the path as one
Beat beat goes the heart
Tomorrow is rounding the bend. The Possibilities are endless. Pleasure and pain and desire and disappointment are all part of the plan. Eyes wide open we fear no more. we walk hand in hand.
Beat beat goes the heart
Beat beat goes the heart
You have two 'the's in the first line
'A new day is dawning the the sunbeams' and I presume 'layer' is lair
'searching ,hoping , yearning' are three gerunds together which is a bit much.
Thanks for the read
Hmnnn... "Once again the Prince of Darkness [regress] into his [layer.] Defeated by the divine. Shall await his next victim..."
this is one sentence and two fragments; even if connected by commas, an awkward grouping of thoughts.
[regress] wrong tense I think, poor choice of word
[layer] lair?
keep writing
:)