Cold Feet

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demure101
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The sound of hooves came through the trees
    to the house of the lady in green
and she blew out her candle and sat quite still
    and hoped that he hadn't seen

the flickering flamer through the diamond panes,
    the sign of her being there –
and she sat in the darkness and held her breath
    in the thickening  late night air.

And her thoughts went back across the years
    when her hair was not yet grey
and they'd plighted their troth one afternoon
    before he was called away.

He had promised that he would return to her bower
    and knock and she would let him in
ere her courage had slipped down the weary, long years
    when alone and wondering she'd been –

and she felt her heart beat with hopes of old
    but she feared for the changes she'd find,
uncertain if she would still dare to be free
    with the rider who'd left her behind.

Then the horseman drew up at the oaken door
    and rapped, and called out to the night
and a hand of mixed longing and ice-cold fear
    gripped her heart and held it so tight.

She never answered but heard him call
    his message a single time more –
and her soft, dark eyes were bright with tears
    when she heard his horse trot from her door

and the echoes closed in and the night grew cold
    and she sat and listened and sighed
as the wood rang out with the horse's hooves
    till the silence returned – and she cried.


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Bellej2009Bellej2009about 7 years ago
Realistic - Lost opportunities

It reminds me of the few times in my life when, because of fear, I have failed to act.

BelleJ

subtleperfumesubtleperfumeover 8 years ago
I recognise the inspiration of de la Mare as well...

There are also echoes - intentional or not - of the bitter sorrow of Dickens' Miss Havisham.

Having said that, your verse has a loveliness and poignancy of its own.

Oldbear63Oldbear63about 10 years ago
Sad, sad

Beautifully written, nicely rhymed without contrivance.

DawnJDawnJabout 11 years ago
Reminiscent of Walter de la Mare

"Is there anybody there? said the Traveler, knocking on the moonlit door." Yours is a wonderful echo of that poem, though of course the situations of each speaker is vastly different. Cool!

Butterflies512Butterflies512about 11 years ago

Getting what you want, especially long pined for love, can be the scariest thing ever...I weep for her missing her chance. I do not intend to miss mine, no matter how scared I am...

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