- Erotic Poetry
- Counting
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Click hereHer body vines about my body
Like a plant seeking out the sun
From a crowded plot
On a sunless street,
Climbing, always climbing.
She twists
And I nearly lose myself.
Love is a struggle
To last through her desire.
I want to last,
But what number comes before 99?
- COMMENTS
todski28over 10 years agoUsing counting as a ways and means of staving off climax, so as you can writhe with hers
plant seeking out the sun,
climbing, always climbing the build up to orgasm?
another well written erotic piece, subtle, and as said earlier a great ending line
normal jeanover 10 years agocare much for your use of "body" twice in the first line. You could have said, perhaps, "her body vines about mine".
I guess I missed something because I could not make much sense of this even attempting to understand it in an abstract way. It' s probably just me, but it seems to be much ado about not much. I did find it interesting though and that I itself would bring me back to read more of your poems.
:)
GuiltyPleasureover 10 years ago...I question the use of "vines" as a verb. "she twines about...." or "she is a vine about..." but that is my only quibble in an otherwise lovely piece.
