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Click hereI have decided to give in
to be driven by base instinct
amoebic in origin
amoral in motive, it is
easier to gorge when hungry
feast when desirous
take when wanting, more
until bloated and satisfied
Conscience is frivolous
a waste of precious time
that could be filled
with self indulgence, smiles
derived from tastes and smells
in forbidden chambers
during stolen moments, hurriedly
heaving and panting, pushing
to the edge of survival
until sweat slicked backs
and spasmodic stomachs
buckle under the pressure, primal
pulsing, building to bursting
personality and circumstance
have no place here, only urges
surging until satiated into submission
I think this poem would read better without "it is" in the first stanza and without "more" in the second stanza. Elsewhere, it is more obvious that you deliberately wanted certain words to be connectors from one stanza to the next. the imagery is disturbing but I assume that is what you intended!
...does that mean they were HORNY? (hehehey!)
wow, passionate, erotic and riddled with
intellect. Very intrigued and damn good readin'
I like the reduction of thought to instinct, here. The opening line seems to suggest an intellectual decision while the rest of the poem dwells on visceral response; I wonder if a structural change at that point might reinforce this change. Move from complete sentances to terse expressions. Just an idea.